Again, that conclusion is excellent.. open-ended, challenging, ambitious. The student DVD works well in there as well, doesn't it. And even though he addresses the audience a bit coming up to the minute, it is quite arresting; you listen. Good idea panning across the map - that works. As does the close up of the model we rigged up outside his office. From all the material that we had, you've managed to make a lucid narrative. There's still a fair amount of cheese coming across in those last few shots, isn't there, but its now a mild Cheddar rather than a blue vein Gorgonzola. I still particularly like the shots of the street and the people.. a wider-community connotation is just what is needed at the end. Marvellous. I'm good with that version if everybody else is?
Again, that conclusion is excellent.. open-ended, challenging, ambitious. The student DVD works well in there as well, doesn't it. And even though he addresses the audience a bit coming up to the minute, it is quite arresting; you listen. Good idea panning across the map - that works. As does the close up of the model we rigged up outside his office. From all the material that we had, you've managed to make a lucid narrative. There's still a fair amount of cheese coming across in those last few shots, isn't there, but its now a mild Cheddar rather than a blue vein Gorgonzola. I still particularly like the shots of the street and the people.. a wider-community connotation is just what is needed at the end. Marvellous. I'm good with that version if everybody else is?
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